Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Mouth-operated gun

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Mouth-operated gun

Nominated by: ~Savage 00:29, August 1, 2011 (UTC)
Nomination comments: It's officially August 1 (per the Wook's internal clock), so here's my first weapon nom! ~Savage 00:29, August 1, 2011 (UTC)

(2 ECs/2 Users/4 Total)

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Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 15:24, August 1, 2011 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 20:37, August 1, 2011 (UTC)
Good job Bob! Kilson^{(Let's have a chat)} 05:43, August 2, 2011 (UTC)
Menkooroo 05:57, August 6, 2011 (UTC)

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Cal, coming in
- ~~Just a couple of things. First: Is it a laser weapon, or a projectile weapon? In the article you refer to it as a "firearm" and then in the infobox as a "gun" instead of a blaster.~~
- ~~Next, I think that it would be better to say something to the effect of "larger galaxy" instead of "greater galaxy". This makes it sound like the rest of the galaxy was better than Laobi.~~
- ~~And, "a conventional model" doesn't seem to make much sense. What exactly do you mean? Is there any way that you can explain this clearer?~~ Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 01:48, August 1, 2011 (UTC)
  - Cool, thanks for the review! As or what it is, we just don't know. This article repeats the total amount of knowledge we have. My assumption would be it's a blaster weapon, but the source calls it a "gun," which could be a blaster or a slugthrower. I'm pretty sure "firearm" is synonymous with gun, and not with only blaster or slugthrower, so I used it as a synonym to avoid repetition. I can change it to "gun" if, for some reason, "firearm" only means one or the other in Star Wars.
    - Yup, I think you're right there. Just checking for clarity.
      - I clarified a bit based on your comment here. How's it look? ~Savage 03:29, August 1, 2011 (UTC)
        That looks better.
  - As for "greater galaxy," I've used it in tons of articles, and don't think it should be a problem. "Great" can also mean "large," so this shouldn't really be an issue.
    - Alrighty.
  - Finally, "conventional model," I think, is fine. Here, "conventional" just means "the way things are usually done, and, well, blasters and the like are not conventionally fired by a mouth, they are conventionally fired by a finger! I could conceivably change it to "hand-operated model," but I'm not sure it should be necessary. Does it make more sense now that I've explained it? ~Savage 02:28, August 1, 2011 (UTC)
    - Sorry for not explaining this better, but for this, I didn't really have a problem with you calling it "conventional" model. But is there some you can explain this better? :P I know I sound repititious, but maybe you could somehow say that it was more expensive than a conventional blaster or something. As it stands, it sounds like your saying it was more expensive than other models of this weapon. And that would raise the question of "what other models of this weapon are there?" Maybe I'm just being a pain, but I'd appreciate it if you could clarify somehow. Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 03:05, August 1, 2011 (UTC)
      - I see what you mean. I just changed it to "hand-operated model" to avoid ambiguity. Try that. ~Savage 03:29, August 1, 2011 (UTC)
        That's much more clearer now. Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 15:23, August 1, 2011 (UTC)
        Great, and thanks! Don't forget to strike your objections, though! :P ~Savage 18:22, August 1, 2011 (UTC)

Exiled Jedi
- ~~If it is not specified as a blaster, why do you have gun redirected to blaster in the infobox? I think this should be changed.~~
- Just a question, but does the source specify that the range is long, or does it just call it a ranged weapon? If it is the former then your fine, but if it is the latter then you should probably just call it a ranged weapon.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 15:29, August 1, 2011 (UTC)
  - Any better? ~Savage 18:22, August 1, 2011 (UTC)

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