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Mitth'ali'astov's original family

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Support

  1. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 20:43, 14 September 2022 (UTC)
  2. ECvote Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 11:01, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
  3. ECvote Had to add a link to gender but the rest was all good Commander Code-8 Hello There! 03:09, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
  4. ECvote JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 16:58, 22 September 2022 (UTC)
  5. ECvote Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 09:03, 24 September 2022 (UTC)

Object

Samonic's original objections section
  • The family is the main topic of this article, therefore, Thurfian's leverage isn't what should be mentioned first. Instead, you should mention that around 19 BBY, the family was troubled because of several mineral's price change. Then, you would mention Mitth family Syndic's talk with Thalias.
  • "informed Thalias of her former family, and how a recent change in price of certain minerals pressed hard on them." — he didnt really inform her of the family, only of the trouble they were having due to the price changes, please reword.
  • " she would betray information on Senior Captain Thrawn," So, Thalias betrayed the information? Please reword this so it reads like she would betray Senior Captain Thrawn and would give Thurfian information that would allow him to remove Thrawn from the Mitth.
  • You must mention that Thalias was taken from the family to become a sky-walker and that Thurfian offered to give the family what they needed if the caregiver gave him the information he desired.
  • Please mention that the Chiss Ascendancy was the Chiss species' nation or mention the Chiss species in the first sentence.
  • Missing pipelink to reproduction and Chiss family ([[Reproduction|born]]) Missing this category.
  • Context for Colonial Station Camco.
  • No mention of who Senior Captain Thawn* is affiliated with. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 16:57, 30 August 2022 (UTC)
  • You should mention that Thalias was a member of the family -> she was born on Camco -> she was taken from the family to become a sky-walker.
  • Missing link to youngling, commanding officer.
  • You should probably use Thurfian's quote mentioning the family's trouble instead of the current ones.
  • Missing a ' after the k in Springhawk :P Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 10:42, 1 September 2022 (UTC)
  • Mention the Ascendancy trilogy please. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 07:56, 8 September 2022 (UTC)
    • ugh always forget that. done BloodOfIrizi Sabine Starbird (talk) 17:54, 8 September 2022 (UTC)
      • As do I. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 18:30, 8 September 2022 (UTC)
  • Please introduce a paragraph separating the main events of Chaos Rising from the others.
  • This is not an official objection, but I thought I'd let you know. You can remove Thurfian's full name and substitute his second mention in the article with "the syndic," decreasing article length.
  • The comma before the […] must be changed with a period. Why? Because the "The family..." part of the quote begins with a capital T, and a comma followed by capitals doesn't make sense. (plus precedent ofc)
  • Can we determine what the "young age" was? I. e. five years old, nine? (or an approximate amount) Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 15:34, 13 September 2022 (UTC)
Manoof
  • Capitalization of syndic is inconsistent and unsure which it should be Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 14:14, 22 September 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 09:04, 24 September 2022 (UTC)