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Mission to Coruscant (Kylo Ren)
- Nominated by: Marvacian Archivist (talk) 11:33, 4 August 2023 (UTC)
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- Date Archived: 05:05, 24 October 2023 (UTC)
- Final word count: 239 words (0 introduction, 95 body, 144 behind the scenes)
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Lew
Gender shouldn't be pipelinked to the pronounI think you should include the shuttle in the infoboxYou should include that Kylo was Supreme Leader of the First Order, and then a way to include that he was a Knight of Ren, in the bodyYou should mention that it was a wolf pack in the body as well per the infoboxTo confirm, the planet context for Coruscant is citeable to the art book?Lewisr (talk) 14:40, 5 August 2023 (UTC)- All done. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 17:05, 5 August 2023 (UTC)
As the last 3 sentences of the BTS start with 'Concept art' could you vary the wording a little?- Done. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 15:43, 6 August 2023 (UTC)
Please find a way to include the shuttle, Kylo's and the model, in the bodyLewisr (talk) 14:54, 6 August 2023 (UTC)- What exactly do you mean as I believe I have included the shuttle in the body. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 15:43, 6 August 2023 (UTC)
- As in include the link to Kylo Ren's command shuttle and mention Upsilon-class command shuttle in place of just shuttle for example Lewisr (talk) 15:56, 6 August 2023 (UTC)
- Done. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 20:44, 6 August 2023 (UTC)
- As in include the link to Kylo Ren's command shuttle and mention Upsilon-class command shuttle in place of just shuttle for example Lewisr (talk) 15:56, 6 August 2023 (UTC)
- What exactly do you mean as I believe I have included the shuttle in the body. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 15:43, 6 August 2023 (UTC)
(Revieiwng note) I found via searching the index of the art book that it does call it a planet. 'Coruscant (planet)' A good reminder to just be sure you have checked the book before using another sourceLewisr (talk) 21:53, 9 August 2023 (UTC)You can add Crait to the prev field- Done. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 18:49, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
The info in the conflict field isn't actually a conflict so that'll need removingLewisr (talk) 15:38, 13 August 2023 (UTC)- Done. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 18:49, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
spookly
Per precedent, newest editions for context references are preferred, meaning Ultimate Star Wars should be swapped with Ultimate Star Wars, New Edition.Dating can be added for Battle of Crait.- Please cite to Timelines itself; once a book is released, there's not reason to defer to the preview/product page.
- Done. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 11:42, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
- Please cite to Timelines itself; once a book is released, there's not reason to defer to the preview/product page.
Would be great if you could check your comma usage in a run-through, seeing both instances of missing and extra ones.—spookywillowwtalk 18:28, 9 August 2023 (UTC)- All done. Tried my best with the last objection. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 21:17, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
- See here for some additional comma additions/removals caught in copy-edit, for reference next time.—spookywillowwtalk 02:37, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
- All done. Tried my best with the last objection. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 21:17, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
Erebus
The wolves don't generally need to be included in the infobox, since they're not really part of the overall mission or a "force" of some kind. As such, could you please switch to using {{Event}}. It works better for this kind of article.Erebus Chronus (Talk) 21:01, 10 August 2023 (UTC)- Done. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 11:42, 13 August 2023 (UTC)