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Mafole

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  1. Nice work, shazil. I fixed a few things in my copy-edits. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 20:53, 25 July 2022 (UTC)
  2. ECvote Clean. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 18:45, 26 July 2022 (UTC)
  3. ECvote Lovely stuff. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 13:20, 30 July 2022 (UTC)
  4. ECvote OOM 224 20:37, 2 August 2022 (UTC)

Object

Samonic
  • Please properly pipelink things. If you wanted to pipelink ship's to warship, do this: "[[Warship|ship's]]"
    • done
  • Punctuation goes before references (around 39 BBY,[2]) Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 18:02, 22 July 2022 (UTC)
    • done
  • Why is borders in capital letters? It shouldn't be.
    • done
  • Mafole was never mentioned outside of Chaos Rising, remove the first mentioned in BTS and just say mentioned.
    • done
  • The audiobook shouldn't have the 1st mention tag, just add {{Mo}}
    • done
  • I think it'd look better if instead of "During that novel's main events, Thalias (formerly Al'iastov)" you said "During that novel's main events, Al'iastov, now Thalias…"
    • done
  • Captain should not be capitalized when the rank is first mentioned.
    • done
  • The novel says that Mafole's loud complaints had made Vorlip mad at her, although it also calls it a "fight," I think it'd be better if you said that Mafole's loud complaints made Vorlip mad.
    • disagree. if i say 'mafole's loud comments made vorlip mad', it shows one way anger (from Vorlip.) saying its a fight shows anger from both parties. Not to mention, 'mafole's loud comments made vorlip mad' is straigt from the book, I changed it up for variety
      • Very well. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 20:54, 22 July 2022 (UTC)
  • Context for the Chiss Ascendancy. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 18:15, 22 July 2022 (UTC)
    • done BloodOfIrizi (talk) 20:15, 22 July 2022 (UTC)
      • I meant something like: "Chiss Ascendancy government" Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 20:35, 22 July 2022 (UTC)
        • that?
  • Third Sight should pipelink to precognition. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 20:35, 22 July 2022 (UTC)
  • Please source the BTS and introduce a paragraph break. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 09:05, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
    • does that work? BloodOfIrizi (talk) 00:00, 24 July 2022 (UTC)
      • Please, before submitting your edits—or nominating articles—make sure everything is sourced. Doing the paragraph break, you've left the last sentence of the first paragraph with no reference. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 10:27, 24 July 2022 (UTC)
        • ugh, sorry. ill get the hang of references one day :/ BloodOfIrizi (talk) 00:08, 25 July 2022 (UTC)
  • Are you absolutely sure that Mafole isn't mentioned in Lesser Evil, Greater Good, or in the present of Chaos Rising? Indirectly mentioned at least? Thalias has talked several times about her caregivers. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 10:27, 24 July 2022 (UTC)
    • nothing in GG/LE, she's IMO'd in the present of CR but I'd argue the flashbacks take precedence as she appears and is named BloodOfIrizi (talk) 00:31, 25 July 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 20:37, 2 August 2022 (UTC)