Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Loden Greatstorm's Jedi Master

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Loden Greatstorm's Jedi Master

  • Nominated by: DarthSkyll (talk) 13:52, 14 December 2023 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:
  • Date Archived: 16:16, 17 December 2023 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 133 words (0 introduction, 101 body, 32 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:THR

(3 ECs/1 Users/4 Total)

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Support

  1. OOM 224 (he/him) 16:33, 16 December 2023 (UTC)
  2. ECvote TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 18:41, 16 December 2023 (UTC)
  3. ECvote Panther436 (talk) 20:12, 16 December 2023 (UTC)
  4. ECvote —spookywillowwtalk 16:15, 17 December 2023 (UTC)

Object

Lew
  • You should note before the YJA stuff that Loden's Master taught him these forms Lewisr (talk) 18:11, 14 December 2023 (UTC)
OOM
  • Snazzy, I've just got one suggestion here: it'd be good to diversify the word choice as "teach"/"taught" are used quite a lot in such a short article. Aside from simply switching the word to a synonym like "instructed" (which works well, but you don't want to do it too much!), perhaps the phrasing "pass on what he had learned about lightsaber forms" would be a good way to tackle the last sentence of the article while making the structure a little different to make reading more engaging for readers (notice how I'm at fault for using the same word, "read," twice just now :P ). OOM 224 (he/him) 09:19, 16 December 2023 (UTC)
    • I changed it, thanks for pointing it out DarthSkyll (talk) 13:55, 16 December 2023 (UTC)
      • No worries! OOM 224 (he/him) 16:33, 16 December 2023 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 16:15, 17 December 2023 (UTC)