Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Insurrection on Yalbec Prime

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Insurrection on Yalbec Prime

  • Nominated by: Erebus Chronus (Talk) 18:55, 4 February 2022 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:TCW

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Support

  1. Hope you don't mind what I pipelinked "mate" to. SilverSunbird (talk) 19:29, 4 February 2022 (UTC)
  2. ECvote Commander Code-8 Hello There! 08:46, 7 February 2022 (UTC)
  3. ECvote Fan26 (Talk) 06:52, 12 February 2022 (UTC)
  4. LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 07:05, 12 February 2022 (UTC)
  5. Loqiical (talk) 00:22, 13 February 2022 (UTC)

Object

Silver
  • I have to ask, why is the article's title conjectural when Hunter literally calls it the "insurrection on Yalbec Prime" word-for-word?
    • It's conjectural because it's not the actual name. Hunter's only stating that they were involved in an insurrection that took place on Yalbec Prime, detailing what the event is. That's why it's conjectural.
  • If the conjecture tag stays, the article's first sentence would flow better if it was reworded to begin by stating the year it happened and that it was the last year of the Clone Wars, before bringing up the insurrection and CF99's involvement. If the tag goes, it should be changed to start "The insurrection on Yalbec Prime..." before mentioning that it happened in the last year of the war and the other details.
    • How's that?
  • The sentence that begins "As a result" is extremely awkward and missing a few words. It should be changed, and possibly split into two separate sentences. SilverSunbird (talk) 19:01, 4 February 2022 (UTC)
    • Fixed. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 19:13, 4 February 2022 (UTC)
      • Looks good, just needs a reference for 19 BBY being the last year of the war. I did a minor copyedit to link "knife" and remove a stray apostrophe. SilverSunbird (talk) 19:24, 4 February 2022 (UTC)
Fan
  • I don't think Crosshair's nickname is neccessary info if he's only mentioned once Fan26 (Talk) 22:01, 5 February 2022 (UTC)
CC-8
  • The purpose of the conjecture template is to show that we're making up an article title, so it's not appropriate to use it when an informal name has been given, even if it's not a formal in-universe name. There's some recent precedent for this.
  • The Battle of Anaxes should be bulleted under the Clone Wars in the concurrent section
  • Hunter should be included in the participants list
  • I don't think we can technically say that the Republic dispatched the Bad Batch based on the dialogue given. The Bad Batch could've happened upon the planet without specific orders.
  • Crosshair's nickname shouldn't be in the infobox if it isn't used in the body
  • The body isn't specific enough in stating that Wrecker was the one who removed the queen's stinger. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 12:26, 6 February 2022 (UTC)
Luca
  • The third ref already states that 19 BBY is the last year of TCW. Therefore, ref four is not needed. LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 15:03, 10 February 2022 (UTC)
    • No it doesn't. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 15:10, 10 February 2022 (UTC)
      • "which Galactic Atlas establishes to have ended in 19 BBY." If it ended in 19 BBY, 19 BBY must be the last year. LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 15:11, 10 February 2022 (UTC)
        • You said it's stated, which it's not. I will fix it once I get to something other than a phone. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 15:25, 10 February 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 18:49, 15 February 2022 (UTC)