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Hasray Terson
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Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:45, February 27, 2014 (UTC)- Supreme Emperor (talk) 15:27, March 8, 2014 (UTC)
- Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 01:55, March 9, 2014 (UTC) - 501st dogma(talk) 00:38, March 10, 2014 (UTC)
- Although I would prefer to see the mention about his appearance in a separate P&t section, because it is only stated that Squesh found him attractive. Clone Commander Lee Talk 21:15, March 11, 2014 (UTC)
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Ayrehead
Could we get context on Viqi Shesh, Coruscant and the war.Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:38, February 21, 2014 (UTC)- Done
Who snapped his neck the Vong or the Voxyn?Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:38, February 21, 2014 (UTC)- Done
Could you reword the final sentence. Instead of he it should say Terson and I think you meant to pipelink the family link.Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:38, February 21, 2014 (UTC)- Done
The article should refer to him as Terson not Hasray.Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:38, February 21, 2014 (UTC)- Done
Could you mention the year of his death somewhere in the body?Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:38, February 21, 2014 (UTC)
SE
Can we get a bit more context on what the remote does?Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:25, February 27, 2014 (UTC)
501
I seem to remember Viqi finding him pretty in appearance. This should be noted in the article.- Done
"...Ku snapped Terson's neck. Before dying, however, Terson gave Shesh a remote to access his family's ship." The way you phrase this makes it seem like Terson's death took a while, which it didn't. I suggest you rework it.- Done
It might be good to also say that Terson was trying to appear dead, and not just having a float in the water for fun. :P- Good work. 501st dogma(talk) 23:22, March 9, 2014 (UTC)