Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Griff Praji

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Griff Praji

• Nominated by: Darth Morrt 09:29, July 29, 2011 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:

(2 ECs/1 Users/3 Total)

Support

1. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 11:59, July 30, 2011 (UTC)
2. Bob Praji approves this article. ~Savage 15:03, August 5, 2011 (UTC)
3. Menkooroo 05:57, August 6, 2011 (UTC)

Object

1. Exiled Jedi
   • What does the last sentence have to with Griff Praji? Please explain its significance.
     • They are Griff's relatives. I reworded it a bit. Tannon Praji's FA article mentions Griff and Nahdonnis, too. Darth Morrt 11:45, July 30, 2011 (UTC)
       • Much better.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 11:59, July 30, 2011 (UTC)
   • Could you try and reword the article to make it more from Griff Praji's perspective?--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 18:08, July 29, 2011 (UTC)
     • Done. Darth Morrt 11:45, July 30, 2011 (UTC)
       • Good work.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 11:59, July 30, 2011 (UTC)
2. Bob
   • "Praji had a son named Nahdonnis, whose daughter was Tyla. His brother, Tannon married a woman named Maree and sired a daughter, Onnelly, Praji's niece." This sentence is confusing; whose brother was Tannon, and which Praji was Onnelly the niece of? ~Savage 15:38, August 2, 2011 (UTC)
     • Better? Tannon is already established as Griff's brother in the first paragraph. Darth Morrt 11:36, August 3, 2011 (UTC)
       • Better, but in the context of that sentence, it needs to be clarified that Tannon is Griff's brother, not Nahdonnis's. In other words, despite the previous paragraph's ID of Tannon as Griff's brother, the "his" in the sentence is causing dissonance. ~Savage 14:07, August 5, 2011 (UTC)
         • Fixed. Darth Morrt 14:55, August 5, 2011 (UTC)

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