Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Graekus Shubelle

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Graekus Shubelle

• Nominated by: Darth Karika^{will destroy your planet!} 22:40, September 10, 2010 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Part 1

(2 ECs/1 Users/3 Total)

Support

1. The Holodeck operator of Star Wars! ~ SavageBob 16:40, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
2. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 17:01, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
3. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 23:44, September 12, 2010 (UTC)

Object

1. Jujiggum
   • A couple minor grammar issues.
   • You could definitely add a short P&T.
   • Tense shifting in the BTS.
   • Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 22:43, September 10, 2010 (UTC)
     • Addressed. Darth Karika^{will destroy your planet!} 23:01, September 10, 2010 (UTC)
   • One more: "Graekus Shubelle was, in the years prior to the beginning of the Clone Wars, the administrator of Hologram Fun World." This is completely unfounded. All the source says is that he was the administrator in 22 BBY; it says nothing about him being the administrator in the years leading up to then. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 15:33, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
     • Fixed. Darth Karika^{will destroy your planet!} 15:47, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
2. Very nitpicky, but the term "recession" is most commonly defined as 2 quarters of consecutive negative growth. This isn't stated in the Holonet article, and should be changed. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 03:59, September 12, 2010 (UTC)
   • Reworded. Darth Karika^{will destroy your planet!} 12:04, September 12, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

• I think I may have reintroduced the tense shifting Jon mentioned, but I think it's correct in this case. Since the HNN article he appears in still exists, we should describe his appearance there in the present tense in an OOU sentence. I won't cry if it gets changed back, though. ~ SavageBob 16:40, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nope, your change is fine; the problem before was that the tense shifted present to past within one sentence. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 17:01, September 11, 2010 (UTC)