Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Gohai

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Gohai

  • Nominated by: Manoof (talk) 08:24, January 8, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: 1st nom

(6 ECs/0 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. ECvote Good job and well done for sticking with it! Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:09, January 14, 2014 (UTC)
  2. ECvote Corellian PremierJedi symbolThe Force will be with you always 21:22, January 14, 2014 (UTC)
  3. ECvote Great to see you on the nom page. Supreme Emperor (talk) 05:25, January 17, 2014 (UTC)
  4. ECvote 501st dogma(talk) 21:40, January 27, 2014 (UTC)
  5. ECvote ~SavageBOB sig 19:08, February 4, 2014 (UTC)
  6. ECvote Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 19:09, February 4, 2014 (UTC)

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Ayrehead
  • Hi and welcome to the comprehensive nominations page! It's always great to see users starting to get articles to status. There's a few things you've not included in the article that are required for a status article which I'll run through below, but you may also want to read the manual of style and the layout guide for help with future articles. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:55, January 8, 2014 (UTC)
    • Thanks, i thought i had the hang of it but i guess not yet :P Manoof (talk) 10:52, January 9, 2014 (UTC)
      • No worries it takes everyone time to learn the ropes. Ayrehead02 (talk) 23:17, January 9, 2014 (UTC)
  • The article needs a behind the scenes section stating what source it appeared in including date and author. This applies to your other two articles as well. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:55, January 8, 2014 (UTC)
    • Done for gohai, will work on the others immediately when I can.Manoof (talk) 10:52, January 9, 2014 (UTC)
      • Could you include the author as well? Ayrehead02 (talk) 23:17, January 9, 2014 (UTC)
  • There's quite a lot more information you can add based on the creatures appearance in the image, e.g it has four limbs, a tail, two ears, black skin, a mouth with teeth and eyes. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:55, January 8, 2014 (UTC)
    • Added the only definite known thing to infobox and the rest to body. Is sharp teeth enough to assume it is carnivorous? Also image is sepia so would black skin be accurate? Manoof (talk) 10:52, January 9, 2014 (UTC)
      • No avoid assumption as much as possible. Also if it's sepia then yeah I'd leave the color out. Ayrehead02 (talk) 23:17, January 9, 2014 (UTC)
        • Fixed. Manoof (talk) 07:58, January 11, 2014 (UTC)
  • You need to add that it's a non-sentient species to the body and also add the article to the category non-sentient creatures. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:55, January 8, 2014 (UTC)
  • Is there a quote you could add? If the bounty hunter book is anything like the Jedi and Sith ones then it has little scribbled notes which you can quote. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:55, January 8, 2014 (UTC)
    • Done. Attributed to the author of that chapter as it was in-text. Manoof (talk) 10:52, January 9, 2014 (UTC)
      • In that case could you add into the text something like "bounty hunter Ro-San Borokki wrote about Gohai in her section of the Bounty hunters code" although using the chapter name. Ayrehead02 (talk) 23:17, January 9, 2014 (UTC)
        • Fixed. Manoof (talk) 07:58, January 11, 2014 (UTC)
          • Could you add the info about the bounty hunters code into the body as well please. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:07, January 11, 2014 (UTC)
  • Context is needed on Nexu and Gundark. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:55, January 8, 2014 (UTC)
    • The only context is it's about the same size. text reads "If it's about your size: think gundark, nexu, or gohai. Manoof (talk) 10:52, January 9, 2014 (UTC)
      • Context as in what they are, something like "comparable in size to a Gundark or Nexu, two large predatory species. Ayrehead02 (talk) 23:17, January 9, 2014 (UTC)
        • Fixed. Manoof (talk) 07:58, January 11, 2014 (UTC)
  • The second sentence doesn't quite read right, I think "If they charged at a being, it was recommended the target dropped to the ground" would be clearer. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:55, January 8, 2014 (UTC)
  • The Bounty Hunters Code should be in a sources section not an appearances section as it is a sourcebook not a novel. It also needs a first mentioned tag next to the source. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:55, January 8, 2014 (UTC)
    • Fixed. Does it need a 1st pictured tag as well? Manoof (talk) 10:52, January 9, 2014 (UTC)
      • First mentioned is different to first appearance you use the template 1stm instead of 1st. First mentioned includes pictured if it's the same source. Ayrehead02 (talk) 23:17, January 9, 2014 (UTC)
  • The information in the infobox also needs to be referenced like the body has been. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:55, January 8, 2014 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • "If they charged at a being, it was recommended the target drop to the ground." Is it known who recommended this?
    • I don't think so, we know the IU chapter author but like a real world book images and their captions would be added by the editor, which might be cradossk... Manoof (talk) 10:21, January 16, 2014 (UTC)
  • Could you mention the artist who created the image in the Behind the scenes section?--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 04:53, January 16, 2014 (UTC)
    • The artist isn't known, the book lists 10 illustrators, but doesn't specify which artist did which artwork. Manoof (talk) 10:21, January 16, 2014 (UTC)
  • The last sentence in the first paragraph seems to contradict itself about the creature's torso.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 22:38, January 31, 2014 (UTC)
    • Should've been waist, fixed Manoof (talk) 08:51, February 2, 2014 (UTC)
501st
  • Mentioning that Gohai had a body would be nice.
    • Fixed. Manoof (talk) 08:27, January 18, 2014 (UTC)
  • Infobox needs to be expanded. You can mention body features in the distinction section, or noteworthy qualities. 501st dogma(talk) 23:45, January 17, 2014 (UTC)
    • Hows that? Manoof (talk) 08:27, January 18, 2014 (UTC)
Savaged
  • The attribution of the opening quote is a bit long. Can it be pared down? I think you could say, "Bounty hunter Ro-San Borokki on gohai" and then discuss the fact that Borokki discussed them in "The Hunt" to the main body of the article.
  • The fact Borokki mentions in the opening quote should also be mentioned in the main body of the article.
    • Its there Manoof (talk) 05:31, January 27, 2014 (UTC)
  • There's a lot more to add about its physical appearance and anatomy. It has a well-muscled body, a broad maw with jaws that can open quite widely, a distinctly triangular-shaped pair of mandibles with their narrowest point jutting toward the creature's anterior, digitigrade limbs, a long and thick tail, a robust torso that comes to a peak between the shoulder blades, and a narrow waist. ~SavageBOB sig 14:32, January 25, 2014 (UTC)
    • Added, some to the infobox as wellManoof (talk) 05:31, January 27, 2014 (UTC)

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