Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Flat-blast artillery shell

The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a Comprehensive article nomination that was withdrawn. Please do not modify it.

Flat-blast artillery shell

• Nominated by: YakovChaimTzvi (talk) 20:42, 19 August 2021 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Fresh off my first status article, memorial staff. If this article isn't already good comprehensive enough, I will make it so!
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Dagger-shaped gunship

• I think it'd look better to introduce the shell in the description like you did in the intro.
  • Better? -- YakovChaimTzvi (talk) 17:43, 23 August 2021 (UTC)
• The devastation of Sunrise is better suited for the history only. I also think you should mention in the history that the destruction was at the hands of the shells.
  • Removed from "description." Should I remove it from the intro as well? -- YakovChaimTzvi (talk) 17:43, 23 August 2021 (UTC)
• "Their explosions made a distinctive sound that resembled that of the zipper on the jacket of Chiss rancher Xodlak'phr'ooa (core name "Lakphro")." You should specify who the sound resembles such to. Also the history suggests Lakris's jacket also did this. Why is that not included in the description? Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 19:46, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
  • How is it now? -- YakovChaimTzvi (talk) 17:46, 23 August 2021 (UTC)

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• I don't think it's necessary to refer to Lakris's core name. VergenceScatter (talk) 20:33, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
  • We don't know Lakris's full name. Do you mean Lakjiip? -- YakovChaimTzvi (talk) 17:37, 23 August 2021 (UTC)
    • Sorry, meant Lakphro. VergenceScatter (talk) 18:20, 23 August 2021 (UTC)
      • Addressed. -- YakovChaimTzvi (talk) 19:00, 23 August 2021 (UTC)

Ecks Dee

• This article currently clocks in at 274 words, making it ineligible for Comprehensive status. 1358 ^(Talk) 18:33, 23 August 2021 (UTC)
  • It's 248 now, after addressing some other issues. -- YakovChaimTzvi (talk) 19:00, 23 August 2021 (UTC)
    • Context is needed for the planet and some other mentioned subjects, and a timeline needs to be established. I can also see at least one contraction right off the bat. There is no way this article will remain under 250 words. 1358 ^(Talk) 19:04, 23 August 2021 (UTC)

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