Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Flanker

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Flanker

Nominated by: Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 14:07, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
Nomination comments: Former GAnom

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Cav:
- Some context on the problems Shiv faced on Orto Plutonia is needed, especially as to why he was killed by Talz warriors. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 09:05, September 7, 2010 (UTC)
  - Contexted a little bit. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 09:58, September 7, 2010 (UTC)
    - Is there any articles regarding the troubles on Orto Plutonia that you can link to? - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 10:04, September 12, 2010 (UTC)
      - No, there isn't—the events in Cold Snap are included in the prelude of the Battle of Orto Plutonia. -- 1358 ^(Talk) 11:08, September 12, 2010 (UTC)
Jujiggum
- ~~"despite this, Shiv wrote letters to Flanker since it relaxed him." "Him" who? Flanker or Shiv? (I realize it's obviously Shiv, but this is poorly worded)~~
  - I'm not seeing the connection between these two things. How is Shiv being relaxed by writing letters something that is in spite of Flanker's death? Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 14:58, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
    - Better?
      - The adjoining phrase does not follow the first one at all. Please reword. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 15:46, September 14, 2010 (UTC)
        Rephrased.
        Wording is just…wierd here. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 19:01, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
        Now? Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:05, September 16, 2010 (UTC)
        Please note the adjustment I made here. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 17:29, September 16, 2010 (UTC)
- ~~The last sentence of the bio contains too many relative terms (i.e. when, shortly after) making the overall chronology difficult to follow.~~
- Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 00:14, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
  - Both fixed. Thank you. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 14:47, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
- ~~Does it matter to Flanker's article that Shiv was killed "when the Republic troops were caught in the middle of a fight between the Talz and Confederate droids"?~~ Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 14:58, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
  - Removed. Added because of Cav's objection. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 11:22, September 13, 2010 (UTC)
    - Does it matter who he was killed by, though? Does it even matter to Flanker's article that Shiv was killed? Once Shiv spoke with Mag about Flanker, I'm not sure anything afterward is needed. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 15:46, September 14, 2010 (UTC)
      - Better? Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:30, September 14, 2010 (UTC)
        No; I didn't suggest that you remove who killed him, I suggested that you remove the fact that he was killed altogether. How does the fact that Shiv was killed matter to Flanker's article? Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 19:01, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
        Killed all. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:05, September 16, 2010 (UTC)
- ~~Could you specify at all what Shiv said to Mag about Flanker?~~ Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 17:29, September 16, 2010 (UTC)
  - Yup. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:31, September 16, 2010 (UTC)

You're currently at 261 words, so this is no longer eligible for CA. Do you want to move it to the GAN? Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 17:37, September 16, 2010 (UTC)
- Yes, but I already have 4 noms. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 18:16, September 16, 2010 (UTC)

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