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Fawn's cousin
- Nominated by: User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 01:39, October 8, 2019 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: o/
(3 ECs/1 Users/4 Total)
Support
Fan26 (Talk) 15:33, October 9, 2019 (UTC)- Zed42 (talk) 19:23, October 10, 2019 (UTC)
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Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 00:51, October 11, 2019 (UTC) 
QuiGonJinn (Talk) 07:49, October 15, 2019 (UTC)
Object
Zed
I know that in the novel, the quote is followed by a comma and nothing else, but I feel like it should have some form of punctuation to end the sentence.The novel doesn't really say her homeworld was Coruscant, just that she visited Batuu from Coruscant.The article should be in the Unidentified individuals category.Zed42 (talk) 21:55, October 8, 2019 (UTC)- Got the three.User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 00:53, October 9, 2019 (UTC)
Fan
I feel "who" would work better than "that" in the first sentence, given it's referring to a sentence.Fan26 (Talk) 22:28, October 8, 2019 (UTC)- That ended up getting edited out when taking out some other things.User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 00:53, October 9, 2019 (UTC)
"The cousin" gets repetitive throughout the body. Maybe swap for a pronoun somewhere?Fan26 (Talk) 14:16, October 9, 2019 (UTC)- That should work.User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 15:00, October 9, 2019 (UTC)
QGJ
Does the book provide any reason why Rakab's interest in this musician was a "bad" romantic decision? If there's no context, maybe another word would fit better here?QuiGonJinn(Talk) 08:54, October 10, 2019 (UTC)
- Rakab says "It was difficult to relive his own bad decisions, but his friends were mirrors he could not escape." right after they tease him about his relationships with the cousin and Anjali. I could use a synonym, but bad seems to encompass it, in my opinion.User:Spookywilloww/Sig2 18:04, October 10, 2019 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 07:05, October 16, 2019 (UTC)