Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Enrichment Dome

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Enrichment Dome

• Nominated by: Holocron ^(Complain) 02:13, January 19, 2011 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: No CSWE entry. Lots of nice plants in that dome.

(1 ECs/4 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Darth Morrt 12:12, January 21, 2011 (UTC)
2. Menkooroo 10:51, January 23, 2011 (UTC)
3. Master Jonathan ^{(Jedi Council Chambers)} 18:33, January 27, 2011 (UTC)
4. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 11:24, February 8, 2011 (UTC)
5. 1358 ^(Talk) 12:52, February 8, 2011 (UTC)

Object

• IIRC, Obi-Wan is not an apprentice during his time in the Dome. Darth Morrt 04:50, January 21, 2011 (UTC)
  • He wasn't. Just checked what the proper title is, and it's Initiate, so that's fixed. Holocron ^(Complain) 07:59, January 21, 2011 (UTC)
• Is there a hyphen in the shortform of Agricorps? I thought there wasn't.
  • The novel uses a hyphen. Holocron ^(Complain) 03:28, January 22, 2011 (UTC)
• Can you give the date of the novel's publication somewhere in the bts?
  • Done. Holocron ^(Complain) 03:28, January 22, 2011 (UTC)
    • Maybe rejig the sentence --- it kind of implies right now that it was the second novel to be published on May 3, 1999.
      • Changed. Holocron ^(Complain) 05:02, January 22, 2011 (UTC)
• I think the article should mention the Dome wall secret annex (with a little bit of detail on it) in the first paragraph rather than waiting until Obi-Wan discovers it, as the first paragraph seems to be a description-kinda-paragraph. Menkooroo 02:20, January 22, 2011 (UTC)
  • Done. Holocron ^(Complain) 03:28, January 22, 2011 (UTC)
    • Careful --- last sentence of the first paragraph is now unsourced, and Dome wall secret annex and Offworld Mining Corporation are now linked twice. You might want to give some context on the annex at the end of the first paragraph (what is it?), too. Menkooroo 04:06, January 22, 2011 (UTC)
      • Fixed. Holocron ^(Complain) 05:02, January 22, 2011 (UTC)

• From the Council Chambers:
  • "The Dome wall secret annex was a room": Conjectural titles like that shouldn't be used in articles; reword and pipelink it.
  • "Kenobi and Treemba discovered the Dome wall secret annex": Same as above; reword.
  • As written, the BTS says that The Dark Rival was the second book in the series that Watson wrote, which is false (Dave Wolverton wrote the first book). Please reword so that it's clear that this was simply the second book in the series.
    • Better? Holocron ^(Complain) 08:54, January 27, 2011 (UTC)
  • Also, I removed the hyphen from AgriCorps; while the book uses it, all other sources I'm aware of, including the Power of the Jedi Sourcebook, The Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia, and The Jedi Path, do not use it, so it's better to go with the majority. Master Jonathan ^{(Jedi Council Chambers)} 04:41, January 27, 2011 (UTC)

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