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Eastern Enrichment Zone
- Nominated by: Holocron
(Complain) 07:30, November 22, 2010 (UTC) - Nomination comments: No CSWE entry, was actually only named once in the novel.
(2 ECs/1 Users/3 Total)
Support
- NaruHina Talk
18:03, November 22, 2010 (UTC) 
SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 11:54, November 25, 2010 (UTC)
1358 (Talk) 22:36, November 26, 2010 (UTC)
Object
Comments
- Not really an objection, but "In 44 BBY, the Jedi Knight Qui-Gon Jinn sent his aspiring apprentice, Obi-Wan Kenobi, to the Eastern Enrichment Zone to learn about the work that the AgriCorps was doing at the facility and to report back to him on their progress." isn't the best wording. Rephrase, please. NaruHina Talk 18:03, November 22, 2010 (UTC)
- I knew it was a fairly bad way to say it after reading the article, but I still can't think of a better way to do it. Holocron (Complain) 23:52, November 22, 2010 (UTC)
- Might I suggest "In 44 BBY, the Jedi Knight Qui-Gon Jinn sent his aspiring apprentice, Obi-Wan Kenobi, to the Eastern Enrichment Zone to learn about the AgriCorps' work at the facility and to report back to him on their progress." 1358 (Talk) 18:54, November 23, 2010 (UTC)
- That sounds better, thanks for the help. Holocron (Complain) 06:05, November 24, 2010 (UTC)
- That sounds better, thanks for the help. Holocron
- Might I suggest "In 44 BBY, the Jedi Knight Qui-Gon Jinn sent his aspiring apprentice, Obi-Wan Kenobi, to the Eastern Enrichment Zone to learn about the AgriCorps' work at the facility and to report back to him on their progress." 1358 (Talk) 18:54, November 23, 2010 (UTC)
- I knew it was a fairly bad way to say it after reading the article, but I still can't think of a better way to do it. Holocron