Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Darth Wrend

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Darth Wrend

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  • "that they may lead to the dark side of the Force," Who is they?
    • Reworded--Vitus InfinitusTalk 03:44, August 13, 2019 (UTC)
      • I think this could still be reworded a little, as right now this part is unrelated to the rest of the sentence, which deals with stuff that is explicitly identified as the Count's warning. I'm assuming this bit about the dark side is part of the warning too, and it should be reworded to make it clearer and the sentence smoother. Fan26 (Talk) 11:24, August 13, 2019 (UTC)
  • The last two sentences should be revised and combined into one sentence about the Sith returning, with Dooku among their numbers. Fan26 (Talk) 03:32, August 13, 2019 (UTC)
    • Reworded--Vitus InfinitusTalk 03:44, August 13, 2019 (UTC)
      • I was wrong to ask for them to be combined, I'm now thinking they worked just as fine as two sentences, especially seeing as it's now a run-on. Sorry. Fan26 (Talk) 11:24, August 13, 2019 (UTC)
  • Also, I'm assuming it's mentioned in the audiobook adaptation. We currently don't have Ana reticle for one it seems, but I was able to undo an audio version of master and apprentice read by Jonathan Davis on audiobooks.com. As the article currently doesn't exist, it counts as a red link. Fan26 (Talk) 03:36, August 13, 2019 (UTC)
    • There is an article for the audiobook adaptation, so you don't have to worry about creating it, just adding it to the appearances. Zed42 (talk) 03:38, August 13, 2019 (UTC)
      • Thank you—added--Vitus InfinitusTalk 03:44, August 13, 2019 (UTC)
        • Huh, not sure how I didn't find that. My bad. Fan26 (Talk) 11:24, August 13, 2019 (UTC)
Zed
  • There's an extra "who" in the first sentence.
  • You should probably mention that he held the title of Darth.
    • I believe that's a bit redundant as Darth becomes part of the name of a Sith Lord, so it'll be weird to say that Darth Wrend held the title of Darth.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 03:46, August 13, 2019 (UTC)
      • Scratch that, I rewrote a bit of the first paragraph to better reflect "Darth."--Vitus InfinitusTalk 04:00, August 13, 2019 (UTC)
  • I think the first two sentences of the second paragraph can also be shortened and merged. Zed42 (talk) 03:43, August 13, 2019 (UTC)
    • Completed--Vitus InfinitusTalk 03:46, August 13, 2019 (UTC)
      • I probably should've been clearer, I meant the sentences that referred to Qui-Gon returning the holocron and his speculation that it referred to Wrend. Zed42 (talk) 04:49, August 13, 2019 (UTC)
Fred strikes back
  • The body itself is over 200 words. Let's see an intro and some sectioning, which will almost certainly bring the article over 250 words. MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 06:12, August 13, 2019 (UTC)
    • Done and yes the article is now eligible for a GA nomination.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 13:54, August 13, 2019 (UTC)

Comments

With the article going around a dozen words over the limit, I'd like to remove this Comprehensive Article nomination to nominate it for a Good Article--Vitus InfinitusTalk 13:56, August 13, 2019 (UTC)

  • Done. Fan26 (Talk) 15:09, August 13, 2019 (UTC)