- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a comprehensive article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Darth Bandon's Jedi Master
- Nominated by: —Jedi Kasra (comlink) 22:57, June 21, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Don't know why I haven't done this sooner… Let's go, WP:KOTOR!
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Support
- 501st dogma(talk) 12:36, June 22, 2012 (UTC)
- NaruHina Talk
14:47, June 27, 2012 (UTC) 
Exiled Jedi 
(Greetings) 22:53, June 30, 2012 (UTC)
OLIOSTER (talk) 14:34, July 4, 2012 (UTC)
Object
- 501st
First of all, lack of BtS.- Darn it, fixed.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:10, June 22, 2012 (UTC)
- I'll look it over more later. 501st dogma(talk) 00:00, June 22, 2012 (UTC)
- Done.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:50, June 22, 2012 (UTC)
You should start the article with "a" instead of "this", and change the context after accordingly. Using "a" is the excepted way for writting conjectrue articles. The bio start should be changed also.- Intro still needs it. 501st dogma(talk) 00:52, June 22, 2012 (UTC)
- Got it.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:55, June 22, 2012 (UTC)
- Intro still needs it. 501st dogma(talk) 00:52, June 22, 2012 (UTC)
You mention the Jedi Civil War in the intro, could you do do in th bio? Just a small mention would do.501st dogma(talk) 00:46, June 22, 2012 (UTC)- Done.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:50, June 22, 2012 (UTC)
There are four instances of Jedi in the first sentence. Could you change it to less somehow?501st dogma(talk) 01:01, June 22, 2012 (UTC)- I think I got it.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 01:08, June 22, 2012 (UTC)
One last thing. The article should be moved to Darth Bandon's Jedi Master, as Master is supposed to be capitalized. Thats it, good work.501st dogma(talk) 01:16, June 22, 2012 (UTC)- Done. I don't remember the reasons behind why the name was the way it was, but it's moved now.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 01:20, June 22, 2012 (UTC)
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