- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a comprehensive article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.
CryoBan smuggling ring
- Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:11, September 6, 2013 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:Another Alderaan nom
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- Exiled Jedi
Could you mention which side Thul was on in the introduction?- Added. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:56, September 7, 2013 (UTC)
Weren't the CryoBan weapons that the smuggling ring brought CryoBan rifles and cells? I think you should mention the weapons from the game and create articles for them if necessary.- Added and created and overall CryoBan article as well. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:56, September 7, 2013 (UTC)
"...aware of its existence due to connections he had with illegitimate company he kept before joining the Republic Army." Could you try and reword this part some? The part about illegitimate company does not read too clearly.- Changed a bit, is it now better? Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:56, September 7, 2013 (UTC)
In the game mechanics section, I believe you should mention that Gundo enlisted the help of the individual.--Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 03:27, September 7, 2013 (UTC)
- Added. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:56, September 7, 2013 (UTC)
- Note: CAs cannot have any redlinks.
- However, this article is at 258 words, so you will need to take it to the GAN page.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 13:33, September 7, 2013 (UTC)
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