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Cohbo family

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  1. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 22:10, 26 July 2022 (UTC)
  2. ECvote Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 14:40, 28 July 2022 (UTC)
  3. ECvote Fan26 (Talk) 18:16, 4 August 2022 (UTC)
  4. ECvote Please never let me catch you using an apostrophe in a plural noun again (sky-walker's) :P JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 21:24, 4 August 2022 (UTC)

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Fan
  • I think the quote attribution can be cut down, mentioning that Cohbo'rik'ardok was telling this to Thrawn isn't necessary information I'd argue.
    • hows that?
  • I don't think all the context on the skywalker program is directly relevant to the Cohbo family. Fan26 (Talk) 01:24, 24 July 2022 (UTC)
Generalirius Cohbo'naki'rre
  • "a portion of the hazardous parts of the galaxy known as the Unknown Regions which was controlled by the Chiss species." this is unnecessary, saying that the "Chiss Ascendancy, the government of the Chiss species" will be enough.
    • reworded
  • No need to introduce Thrawn's full name, just his core name, as he is only mentioned once. His mention is unnecessary, no relevance to the Cohbo family.
    • removed full name, Thrawn mention provides context for who Borika was
  • The locations parameter should have two bullet points for the ranch, and one for Ool. I think I fixed that myself on Mafole.
    • added
  • Missing link to marriage.
    • added
  • The sky-walker part is unnecessary, just say "the couple settled on Ool, running the Ardok Ranch." Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 10:02, 24 July 2022 (UTC)
  • Lesser Evil being the third novel in Zahn's Ascendancy Trilogy is redundant, as a trilogy always ends in the third book, film, whatever it is.
    • removed
  • I believe we can assume that Borika joined the Cohbo family at some point between around (she was born in 61 BBY) 47 BBY and 18 BBY, as most sky-walkers lose their Third Sight when they're 14, and join a ruling family (In this case, the Irizi) immediately after that. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 12:21, 25 July 2022 (UTC)
    • ref added BloodOfIrizi Sabine Starbird (talk) 17:38, 25 July 2022 (UTC)
      • Introduce another (<ref name="Lesser Evil" />) reference before you say sometimes. If you do not, you'd be sourcing everything before the dates to the date note. I insist that you read your article before you submit edits as you may encounter errors like this. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 18:38, 25 July 2022 (UTC)
  • I'd like you to say that Zirika was rematched to the Irizi. (Literally say that she was rematched) Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 16:23, 26 July 2022 (UTC)
Brahabo
  • "placing the end of Borika's sky-walker term at around 47 BBY. Therefore, Borika must have joined the Cohbo family" You should make a point at the start of the ref note to say that Borika joined the family after their sky-walker term etc. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 10:39, 27 July 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 21:24, 4 August 2022 (UTC)