Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Burnium Ro's stronghold

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Burnium Ro's stronghold

  • Nominated by: LucaRoR (Talk) 08:40, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
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  1. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 09:41, 23 August 2021 (UTC)
  2. Good work. Technically, I think "grey" should be spelled "gray" as the American spelling, but I don't really think that matters here. -- YakovChaimTzvi ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol (talk) 21:09, 27 August 2021 (UTC)
  3. Manoof (talk) 11:05, 29 August 2021 (UTC)
  4. ECvote Commander Code-8 Hello There! 08:51, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
  5. ECvote JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 22:20, 6 September 2021 (UTC)

Object

Braha'tok's gunship
  • The date in the infobox is not referenced.
  • The parallels with the Nihil rhetoric was reasoning behind the Tarkin granting Zahra a lot of firepower, rather than the reason they went for Ro in the first place. Please revise that sentence.
  • You should introduce the decoy part when you first get to following "Ro." Something like, "follow Ro from a social club in Grail City to his stronghold, unbeknownst that it was actually a decoy of the warlord." Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 18:43, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
  • One more thing. A brief descriptor that the Nihil are now "obselete" would be beneficial. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 19:08, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
    • All done. For the Nihil I've added "ancient" since we don't really know if they're totally extinct. LucaRoR (Talk) 19:12, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Looking at quotes from the comic, "Let's follow the rat back to his nest." would be a decent one for this article. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 07:31, 22 August 2021 (UTC)
Manoof
  • In the quote "his is warlord named Burnium Ro", is this original to the text? If so it needs "[sic]" to show it as true to the source. On a similar note, I made some grammatical updates so just check you're ok with them and they don't deviate from the source :) Manoof (talk) 11:43, 28 August 2021 (UTC)
    • Oops, typo, fixed. (Thanks for the grammar/spelling corrections). LucaRoR (Talk) 11:51, 28 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Are the windows black or are they shadows and the white bits the windows? Manoof (talk) 11:43, 28 August 2021 (UTC)
    • From what I see, the windows are black and the white is the light that reflects. LucaRoR (Talk) 11:51, 28 August 2021 (UTC)
      • Hmmmm, I'm not 100% convinced, some of them look like the black could be roof or wall shadows. Maybe just remove the colour? Manoof (talk) 11:05, 29 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Just regarding the Nihil line, it may be better to say something that closely aligns with the source. I'm just going off the Nihil article which indicates their obsolescence by this time, whereas the line as you have it now could be read that the organisation is ancient and still active. Manoof (talk) 11:43, 28 August 2021 (UTC)
    • Fair enough, changed. LucaRoR (Talk) 11:51, 28 August 2021 (UTC)
CC-8
  • The (2020) in the comic title should not appear in the Bts
  • Is the bit about Ro's tactics really relevant to this article?
  • Is Ro's decoy notable enough for a review?
    • A review means an article? I wouldn't say so, but if you want I can create it. LucaRoR (Talk) 11:12, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
      • Yup lol. I have no strong feelings on this one.
  • The Bts should specify that the appearance was in the flashback
  • Who gave the orders for the Carrion Spike to fire on the stronghold? (Feels like I'm on a war crimes tribunal asking that lol)
    • Added. One thing, in your latest copy-edit you've added Gender/Legends, I've changed it to Gender since the article is canon. I hope it is correct. LucaRoR (Talk) 11:12, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
      • I clearly write too many Legends articles and also should have been sleeping instead of reviewing Commander Code-8 Hello There! 08:51, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
Macaroni
  • Please avoid one-sentence paragraphs by incorporating the last bit into the first or second. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 03:57, 5 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 22:20, 6 September 2021 (UTC)