Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Borvo the Hutt's starfighter

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Borvo the Hutt's starfighter

• Nominated by: Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 23:17, September 21, 2010 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Cannon fodder

(0 ECs/1 Users/1 Total)

Support

1. NAYAYEN 18:59, September 22, 2010 (UTC)

Object

1. • Just one: "...and starfighters had a small cross-section" Eh? Even if you put "the" in there, it still sounds odd. Reword? NAYAYEN 23:27, September 21, 2010 (UTC)
     • I put "profile" instead. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 14:25, September 22, 2010 (UTC)
2. Just at first glance, the intro could use a slight expansion. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 15:04, October 2, 2010 (UTC)
   • Too much? Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 01:22, October 4, 2010 (UTC)
     • Maybe cut it down a tiny bit, but not a whole lot. Also, please make the first sentence less redundant. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 01:27, October 4, 2010 (UTC)
       • Done. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 03:54, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
3. Jujiggum's full review
   • Please change the beginning of the History and/or Characteristics section, since they start the same exact way.
     • Mixed. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
   • You say "several missions" but you only link one mission.
     • More added. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
       • I've been thinking about this, and I think a better way to do it would be to say "…several missions, including…" And then list a few missions separately. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 21:23, October 7, 2010 (UTC)
         • Sure, links moved. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 00:38, October 10, 2010 (UTC)
           • Okay, but please check your grammar here. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 14:47, October 10, 2010 (UTC)
             • Conjunctions added. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 00:07, October 11, 2010 (UTC)
   • "Other starfighters" This isn't clear whether you mean some more of this particular class of fighter or a completely different type of starfighter.
     • Additional. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
   • "destroying or driving off the starfighters" Just a slight wording issue: this sounds like we don't know which happened, whereas I believe you mean that some were destroyed while some were driven off.
     • Reworded. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
   • "his personal starfighter" Which his? Sykes' or Kotha's? (Yeah, I know you mean Kotha's but the wording here isn't very clear)
     • Fixed. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
       • "and continued to fly in his personal starfighter as Sykes' wingmen" Huh? Do you mean wingmate? Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 21:23, October 7, 2010 (UTC)
         • Hmn. I guess I should not have transposed the link/pipe. Fixed. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 02:12, October 8, 2010 (UTC)
   • I don't believe you should have the complement section filled in the infobox; that is for the vehicles/ships/troops that a ship can carry. And since these starfighters have only one pilot… That said, you also need to fill in the "Crew" section of the infobox.
     • Taken care of. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
   • Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 15:39, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
4. You need a sources section, as well as references in the infobox and text.--ID-21 Dolphin ^(Talk) 20:10, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
   • Nope; per WP:S, "Articles with only one source or appearance may be sourced, although it is not required." Furthermore, the starfighter appeared only in the video game, which is an "appearance," not a "source," so no Sources section is necessary (unless you can name a source in which this starfighter appeared). Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 20:19, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
     • Oh, well. I added the refs; and no sources, as the starfighters appear in neither the instruction manual nor the CSWE. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
       • Objection(s) overridden by EduCorps 10:16, October 17, 2010 (UTC)
5. You are currently at 263 words, so the article is no longer eligible for CA status, I'd suggest taking this to the GAN. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 22:23, October 13, 2010 (UTC)
   • Noted, but do you think it could be a GA as it stands? Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 21:16, October 14, 2010 (UTC)

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