Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Battle of the Quermia system

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Battle of the Quermia system

• Nominated by: 501st dogma^(talk) 11:40, August 31, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:As I was bored and couldn't think of anything to nom, I decided to work on NaruHina's shedscorcher.

(1 ECs/3 Users/4 Total)

Support

1. Thanks for helping out! NaruHina ^Talk 00:07, September 1, 2012 (UTC)
2. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 14:25, September 7, 2012 (UTC)
3. Tinwe^(comlink) 11:12, September 16, 2012 (UTC)
4. August noms gooo away! Winterz (talk) 18:02, October 6, 2012 (UTC)

Object

1. Enthusiasm!
   • "The Mandalorians Neo-Crusaders, who were invading the Galactic Republic via three routes as a part of the Mandalorian Wars, a conflict fought between the two sides, triumphed.…" This is apositive withing an apositive. It needs breaking up.
   • "The battle in the Quermia system was only referenced in The Essential Atlas, released in 2009 and written by Daniel Wallace and Jason Fry." Double "and." Rephrase. NaruHina ^Talk 21:56, August 31, 2012 (UTC)
     • Both taken care of. 501st dogma^(talk) 23:28, August 31, 2012 (UTC)
       • Just putting in dashes isn't going to cut it. They don't work like secondary commas. Now the apositive describing the Neo-Crusaders has no defined end point. NaruHina ^Talk 23:32, August 31, 2012 (UTC)
         • Fixed. 501st dogma^(talk) 23:42, August 31, 2012 (UTC)
           • Cool beans. NaruHina ^Talk 00:02, September 1, 2012 (UTC)

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