Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Battle of Farstine

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Battle of Farstine

  • Nominated by: 501st dogma(talk) 22:37, July 21, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:Farstine, the home of Frankenstien

(2 ECs/1 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. ECvote Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 18:00, July 23, 2012 (UTC)
  2. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 19:15, July 23, 2012 (UTC)
  3. ECvote Menkooroo (talk) 17:25, August 15, 2012 (UTC)

Object

  1. Ingolstadt
    • "The battle was part of the Five Veils Campaign, an Imperial campaign launched against members of the Trade Federation, led by Customs Vizier Marath Vooro, who refused to..." The mention of Marath Vooroo is an apositive withing an apositive, making this a run-on sentence. Break it up. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 05:38, July 23, 2012 (UTC)
      • Better? 501st dogma(talk) 13:31, July 23, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Exiled Jedi
    • Could you make it clearer that Vooro is captured during a battle?--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 17:28, July 23, 2012 (UTC)
      • Done. 501st dogma(talk) 17:57, July 23, 2012 (UTC)

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