- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a comprehensive article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Battle of Altyr V
- Nominated by: Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:48, August 31, 2010 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Never done a battle before...
(2 ECs/1 Users/3 Total)
Support
- Darth Karikawill destroy your planet! 23:19, August 31, 2010 (UTC)
Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 00:36, September 15, 2010 (UTC)- Please note that ranks should not be capitalized if they are not refering to a person ("The Commander participated...", but "he was a commander"). -- 1358 (Talk) 16:03, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
Object
- Karika
Body: The Jedi General you mentioned in the infobox should get a link in the body.- He is linked line two a.
BTS: The BTS claims the battle was first mentioned in the CSWE, but the Sources are Star Wars Insider.Darth Karikawill destroy your planet! 13:37, August 31, 2010 (UTC)- Fixed. Thank you. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:06, August 31, 2010 (UTC)
- Jujiggum
Any reason you write out Bly's full number but not Deviss'?- Eh, I meant that you should write out both of their full numbers. Remember, in CAs without full bodies, the "intro" is treated as the body of the article. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 15:08, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
- Ah thank you. Fixed.
- Okay, but now who's this Deviss guy? Make sure you mention his nickname, or else the reader will be confused who you're talking about. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 15:49, September 14, 2010 (UTC)
- Fixed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:21, September 14, 2010 (UTC)
- Okay, but now who's this Deviss guy? Make sure you mention his nickname, or else the reader will be confused who you're talking about. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 15:49, September 14, 2010 (UTC)
- Ah thank you. Fixed.
- Eh, I meant that you should write out both of their full numbers. Remember, in CAs without full bodies, the "intro" is treated as the body of the article. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 15:08, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
"…the Republic forces stumbled." Hmm, is there a better word you can use here? His just doesn't seem very natural for the situation.- Just a quick question about this: "…the Republic forces halted their advance." Do you mean the Republic forces decided to stop their advance due to the death of the Jedi? If so, then you can keep this as is. But if you mean that the Separatists stopped the Republic advance following the Jedi's death, then this needs to be reworded. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 15:08, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
- Fixed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:36, September 13, 2010 (UTC)
- Just a quick question about this: "…the Republic forces halted their advance." Do you mean the Republic forces decided to stop their advance due to the death of the Jedi? If so, then you can keep this as is. But if you mean that the Separatists stopped the Republic advance following the Jedi's death, then this needs to be reworded. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 15:08, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
Remember: do not use "unidentified" or "unknown" in the infobox.Did the battle really take place over the course of three years, as you currently suggest in the infobox?- Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 00:20, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
Also: please put in the full infobox—just because you don't use all the fields doesn't mean you should just delete them from the article. Hide/ignore the ones you don't need as applicable, but don't delete them form the article.Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 00:23, September 9, 2010 (UTC)- All fixed. Thank you. Clone Commander Lee Talk 14:40, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
- The last one also remains; you have made absolutely no changes to the infobox structure whatsoever. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 15:08, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
- Bah, forgot it. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:34, September 13, 2010 (UTC)
- The last one also remains; you have made absolutely no changes to the infobox structure whatsoever. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 15:08, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
- All fixed. Thank you. Clone Commander Lee Talk 14:40, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
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