Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Barren planetoid

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Barren planetoid

• Nominated by: Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 20:49, August 3, 2010 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Rezi Soresh's last stand

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Object

1. Barren Fel
   • The infobox establishes a lot about the planetoid --- no moons, no native flora, no native fauna, no indigenous population, barren rock --- this should all be in the article's body, too.
   • Try to avoid one-sentence paragraphs. They're generally a no-no.
   • "When the deadline passed..." What deadline? Mention that Soresh gave a deadline when you establish that he wants to lure Skywalker to the system.
   • Give context on Han Solo.
   • "Soresh used an impostor..." used the impostor for what? Welcoming the rebels?
   • Who captured Skywalker and his companions? The article doesn't mention that Soresh has any companions on the planetoid.
   • Who are Luke's other companions? A rebel squad?
   • A little bit of context is needed on the Emperor.
   • "He drew an Imperial and Rebel fleet" makes it sound like there's a joint Rebel-Imperial fleet.
   • "Skywalker betrayed Soresh and led his companions away." Can you give a little bit more detail?
   • "including Soresh's body" is detail that probably isn't relevant to the article about the planetoid.
   • You mention a battle --- can you create an article for said battle?
   • Does Uprising give any other details about the planetoid that could find their way into the article? Menkooroo 02:17, August 17, 2010 (UTC)
     • All of the above addressed. Of coures, it is now well over the wordcount. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 17:47, August 17, 2010 (UTC)
       • Awesome! Go for a Good article nomination if you feel it's ready. You'll have to leave a message here requesting that the Educorps remove this nom, as it's now ineligible for CA status. Menkooroo 01:13, August 18, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

• Note for the Grey Cadre: As stated above, this article is now over 250 words. Menkooroo 15:02, August 25, 2010 (UTC)