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Attack on a Republic cruiser
- Nominated by: Erebus Chronus (Talk) 05:23, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: An interesting engagement that I would like more info on someday
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I would reword the second sentence to get rid of the second comma and join those sections together, for example changing it to "the saboteur's death as he chose to take his own life rather than submit to questioning".As for revising the second paragraph, I don't think the "sometime after" part at the beginning is necessary. I also think it might sound better to say that Obi-Wan "showed" the recording of the attack.SilverSunbird (talk) 05:36, 17 October 2021 (UTC)- First objection taken care of, however, I chose "sometime later" as we don't know how long after the attack Obi-Wan conducts the investigation. I also think that he revealed the attack more than just simply showed it. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 05:44, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
- Point taken. SilverSunbird (talk) 06:06, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
- First objection taken care of, however, I chose "sometime later" as we don't know how long after the attack Obi-Wan conducts the investigation. I also think that he revealed the attack more than just simply showed it. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 05:44, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
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- Additional context: I would include a brief description of the Mandalorian's equipment, plus Satine's reaction/response OOM 224 21:54, 23 October 2021 (UTC)