Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Ashu

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Ashu

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  1. —spookywillowwtalk 02:45, 17 April 2022 (UTC)

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OOM
  • No quote?
    • Added quote.
  • From what I can recall, Dark Disciple has plenty of information on each member of the family that you can expand the article with. OOM 224 11:36, 11 April 2022 (UTC)
  • The GA Atrocity on Mahranee capitalises "Firstborn," but this article doesn't. Which is correct? OOM 224 20:35, 11 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Since it's a GA, I went on ahead and assumed that it was correct and capitalized the word. AmazinglyCool CIS roundel (talk) 22:02, 11 April 2022 (UTC)
      • What does the source actually say though? Can you please check? OOM 224 21:50, 14 April 2022 (UTC)
        • It says: "The last thing Ashu-Nyamal, Firstborn of Ashu, would ever see was the shattered expression of despair in the Jedi’s eyes." AmazinglyCool CIS roundel (talk) 23:34, 14 April 2022 (UTC)
  • I remember that the novel goes quite a bit into the conversations between the family members, or at least Ashu-Nyamal's thoughts about her family members. The family dynamics are worth elaborating on here. OOM 224 20:39, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
Manoof
  • Context for the Atrocity, specifically that it was a genocide wiping out the Mahran committed by the Separatists. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 09:12, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
  • You need to add a couple things, keep an eye on your wordcount with this as you may need to section:
    • You need more of the context out of Atrocity on Mahranee. This is crucial as it resulted in the end of the family line. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:16, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
    • The evacuation ship was sent by the Republic and crewed by clones younger than Nya. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:16, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Nya was familiar with Dooku. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:16, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
    • They pleaded with Dooku directly to spare them given the number of families, children, injured and other non-combatants that were on board. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:16, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
    • The transmission was being broadcast to the Jedi, Dooku was aware of this and claimed their deaths as a result of the Jedi/Republic. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:16, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
  • You need to note Nya is Ashu-Nyamal's nickname before you start using it in isolation. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 14:27, 26 April 2022 (UTC)
  • "A proud line was Ashu" is completely missing. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 14:27, 26 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Timeline is missing details still: Capital city was destroyed, they sent a call to help to the Jedi who answered their plea, but came too late. Nya left Rakshu to go to the bridge in an attempt to help as part of walking the warrior path and they knew their fate was sealed. Nya had never been in space and was overwhelmed by how small and desperate the planet looked. Again, these details are relevant as the demise of the family line. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 14:27, 26 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Should note that Nya is an excellent shot and was prepared to fight with blaster or her stinger if the cruiser was boarded. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 14:27, 26 April 2022 (UTC)
  • You should specify that Nya reacted to Dooku's voice with hostility because of his false promises and lies. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 14:27, 26 April 2022 (UTC)
  • You need to connect that Chubor contacted Dooku to plead for mercy, that Dooku knew the discussion was transmitted to the Jedi and that he blamed the deaths on the Jedi/Republic. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 14:27, 26 April 2022 (UTC)
  • You should note the audiobook in the BTS and that it was performed by Marc Thompson, including the voices of Rakshu and Nya. BTS should also note that it was based on an unreleased Clone Wars episode. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 14:27, 26 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Sorry to interject, but there is plenty of precedent not to include audiobooks in the bts. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 21:37, 26 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Intro definitely needs another line or two so you'll definitely need to bring this to GAN Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 14:27, 26 April 2022 (UTC)
Ayrehead
  • I make the article 253 words and given that there are several objections asking for expansion I imagine this need to move up to GAN. Ayrehead02 (talk) 13:22, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

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