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All Planets Relief Fund

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    • Hey, Holocron. Really, really, really good to see you back. I have a couple of things here:
    • "Galactic Republic" isn't mentioned or linked in the article outside of the infobox. It should be somewhere in there, and it would additionally be good context for Palpatine (of what is he the Supreme Chancellor?).
      • Done
    • On that note, Palpatine's title should probably be included in the "Proposed by" field of the infobox.
      • Done
    • The infobox says that he proposed it in c. 24 BBY, but the article itself outright says "in 24 BBY." Which one is correct?
      • My bad. The book doesn't actually state when it was proposed. Removed the infobox year.
    • The description of the bill in the first paragraph almost copies the quote from the novel verbatim. Can you put it in your own words?
    • Can you give context for Tyro in the quote attribution? A title, a rank, or something?
      • Done
    • The article could use a little more info on the ceremony --- namely, where it takes place. Also any other details that are available, such as who hosts it, etc.
      • The ceremony is a bit sparse on details even in the novel. But I did add where it takes place.
    • Is it worth mentioning the response to the bill? ie, Tyro thinks it's a good one.
      • Other than Tyro and Palpatine, nobody else really comments on the bill.
        • That's fine. Tyro's thoughts on it probably wouldn't be out of place in the article itself, though; they're currently only in the quote. Also, I combined two sentences to avoid some repetition; see what you think. Menkooroo (talk) 14:31, November 26, 2012 (UTC)
          • Added a sentence about its reception. Holocron Greatholocron (Complain) 03:13, November 27, 2012 (UTC)
            • Great. I removed the links to Tyro and Senatorial aide in the quote attribution; now that they're in the article itself, they don't need to be there. Menkooroo (talk) 02:11, November 30, 2012 (UTC)
    • And, one more: Can you add release dates for the novel and the CSWE in "Behind the scenes" ?
      • Done
    • Again, I'm very glad to see you here! Here's hoping you can stay a while, and get reacquainted with the FAN page, too. Menkooroo (talk) 08:26, November 26, 2012 (UTC)
      • That's the plan. I've had a really bad year, and this is kind of therapeutic. Although I'm obviously a bit rusty. Holocron Greatholocron (Complain) 09:02, November 26, 2012 (UTC)
        • Not going to object over this, but it might be worth making the "result" field of the infobox say "Passed in 24 BBY" just so that the infobox can give some idea of the timeframe.
    • OK. I have some bad news. The article is 239 words, which, according to the rules at the top of this page, means that an intro needs to be added. That will take the article over 250 words, meaning that it will have to go to the GAN page. Should be an easy GAN, though; you can do it! Menkooroo (talk) 02:11, November 30, 2012 (UTC)

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